I was curious if I could post review with nothing on it and you can but now I can't remove this Oh well. As the author said in the description of this story it's his first work and it shows.
But it is decently entertain if nothing amazingly high-quality and most of stuff on the site is of questionable quality anyways
so should you read this story? the answer to that question is... I have no idea
The Female Swordsman's (but sometimes Gunslinger's) and her cast of split personalities' 5 Minute Walk to Being OP.1) So much randomness. VR and guns in fantasy, split personalities... just why? "Yeah this world is ahead in some stuff and behind at other stuff" is neither good explanation or engaging worldbuilding. Feels like you throw any stuff you could think of in the story without any reason whatsoever.2) Just tropes. Isekai'd man with tragic backstory gets OP cheats, is almost immediately unbeatable, meets some chaff just 3.5 steps out of his cheat home, destroys it and saves some ladies (any of them royalty yet?) without breaking a sweat. Ladies in awe of her power so much they pass out just from mentioning her own sword style, MC finds special weapon in a random shop for a few pennies, goes to guild and gets S rank immediately. Split personalities for making internal dialogues included.3) Too convenient. Learning swordsmanship, magic and all those pretty skills even at x1000 speed would have taken a lot longer than a few days (which would have been both Swordsman-ish and Journey-ish). MC adjusts to anything and everything (being reborn, beign a girl, killing etc.) too fast and too easy. Stats say she can lift only 10 kg, but she swings her sword easily, cuts with it and takes another person's swing on her sword. I am not believing that being 10 kg power, nope. There is so little worldbuilding, challenge, conflict and actual plot that it is not engaging. Probably good as a first-time writing, but not exactly something for readers to look forwards to. Thank you for you trying though, hope you would not feel too personal for my review and would be able to git gud (if you want to, of course).
Everything was going well for him: a well-earning job, a car, a home, but then he was tossed into a world of immortals, in the body of Jade Beauty of all things!
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Hello, there. I’d written this novel a while back
(DB) A ‘normal’ teenager was watching Mumei, until an ad popped on his screen, now trying to get rid of the ad ask ”Want to have an adventure?”
(A/N: Doing for fun, And this one turned one of my favorites to work on,
A young man wakes up following a tragic incident. A [Gate] opened in the middle of the road while he was driving, unleashing eldritch monstrosities upon mankind. He was one of the many people who fell victim to them during their first appearance.
Debated as one of the best players of all time in the competitive VRMMO ‘Champions of Andartha,’ Yuusha ‘the Untouchable’ suddenly disappeared from the pro scene without a trace. Years later, at the height of the game’
I was always told your entire life flashes before your eyes at this moment. Instead, I dreamt of another world, a world filled with magic! But what I am becoming in that world is a thing of nightmares.
I was curious if I could post review with nothing on it and you can but now I can't remove this Oh well. As the author said in the description of this story it's his first work and it shows.
But it is decently entertain if nothing amazingly high-quality and most of stuff on the site is of questionable quality anyways
so should you read this story? the answer to that question is... I have no idea
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The Female Swordsman's (but sometimes Gunslinger's) and her cast of split personalities' 5 Minute Walk to Being OP.1) So much randomness. VR and guns in fantasy, split personalities... just why? "Yeah this world is ahead in some stuff and behind at other stuff" is neither good explanation or engaging worldbuilding. Feels like you throw any stuff you could think of in the story without any reason whatsoever.2) Just tropes. Isekai'd man with tragic backstory gets OP cheats, is almost immediately unbeatable, meets some chaff just 3.5 steps out of his cheat home, destroys it and saves some ladies (any of them royalty yet?) without breaking a sweat. Ladies in awe of her power so much they pass out just from mentioning her own sword style, MC finds special weapon in a random shop for a few pennies, goes to guild and gets S rank immediately. Split personalities for making internal dialogues included.3) Too convenient. Learning swordsmanship, magic and all those pretty skills even at x1000 speed would have taken a lot longer than a few days (which would have been both Swordsman-ish and Journey-ish). MC adjusts to anything and everything (being reborn, beign a girl, killing etc.) too fast and too easy. Stats say she can lift only 10 kg, but she swings her sword easily, cuts with it and takes another person's swing on her sword. I am not believing that being 10 kg power, nope. There is so little worldbuilding, challenge, conflict and actual plot that it is not engaging. Probably good as a first-time writing, but not exactly something for readers to look forwards to. Thank you for you trying though, hope you would not feel too personal for my review and would be able to git gud (if you want to, of course).
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