This is somewhat of a place holder review until I've read everything, but so far it does deserve the review. It's pretty decent slice of life smut. 

My only advice to the author is that you could work more on the little details. What type of dress do people wear? Is it medieval like poet shirts and the grandfather of pants? Do they wear Victorian dress? Or is it togas or Chinese qipaos or Japanese kimonos? Then what is the architecture like? Same qualifiers there. Is the road paved or cobbled stone or packed dirt? Are there carriages around? What are they like? What does this adventurer gear look like? And the food he's ate? What does that taste like? What does it feel like to eat mana as he does?  These little details are where you're weakest at.

The syntax is pretty good. There are a number of errors here or there, but otherwise no issue there. The pacing is so far okay, but I'm not far in enough to comment. I will say that the story boarding I can sense is pretty decent. I like your use of foreshadow here or there too throw in some seemingly small thing in the scenes. The smut was an okay starter, but I don't care much about it since it wasn't a harem girl.

Your combat is a little weak. You again need more detail. The scene doesn't read right. It is hard to imagine them. But it just needs a little more feeling and presence. Describe that proprioception triggers. Describe abilities and such better, but it is still early to call on that.

Keep it up, man!

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Damn this is good if you came for the smut + incest you are in the good novel 😂

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A very good story, with a good plot. Try to read this story. The r18 scene are good and the MC is strong.

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