In particular, is Chapter 7 [So If you open the gates you have more chakra but your body might not be able to handle that. But why can Naruto's body handle so much extra chakra from Kurama? Hmm, maybe it's because the eight gates also use the organs like letting the heart-rate go berserk so that your blood flow is extremely high?]

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This is very wrong! Naruto has an immense chakra amount cuz he is an uzumaki, it is a bloodline advantage. Not to boot, Kurama is kept on an uzumaki seal that literally allows naruto to take full advantage. It can also be argued that Minato stole Kurama's negative half (I can't remember if it's yang or yin), which makes Kurama's chakra load more bearable to Naruto since Kurama's most malevolent side has been already extracted.

Meanwhile, eight gates is a specialized art that complements and boosts taijutsu users' skills. It doesn't increase chakra, it just makes it MORE explosive. If eight gates can increase chakra, then guy and lee might've been ninjutsu users too. The reason they resolved to eight gates is because of their meager chakra.

I can't believe this. I call myself a casual fan of naruto, but I know this much... this is insufferable...

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Chapter 7 was irritating, so is chapter 8... Tenten has no affinities to medical ninjutsu, she specializes in bukijutsu. Tenten suddenly having this affinity in the fanfic hurts the logic of the Narutoverse. She is a weapon master whose versatility rivals heavy hitters like choji. Without doubt, Tenten is strong. I can imagine how this fanfic gets more inaccurate along with the story, so I just can't continue. In the end, I chose to drop.

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I can't bear with the inaccuracies.

2.) CULTIVATION!? NOOOO, PLEASE DON"T!

Truthfully, the Narutoverse has the closest representation of the Chinese cultivation genre among the many animes I know, BUT the SHINOBI WORLD and the STAPLE CULTIVATION NOVELS have different encompassing POWER SYSTEMS! The ending of Chapter 8 is the final nail that convinced me to drop. It feels wrong to entirely new levels.

PS. This is constructive criticism and I hope that others won't take my words with hostility.

Edit: I wrote this review January 25, 2022. I updated it with an Edit clause as of April 22, 2025. I remembered SH as a happy place filled with kind readers and then I looked at the stuff I've given review and realized I was a piece of sh*t. Anyways, after several years of writing fanfics myself and getting my fingers calloused, I realized how sh*tty I am as a human being. It's tough to please everyone. Let this be a lesson for me to be a kinder person. Anyways, let this review remain here as a matter of principle and a reminder to everyone sh*tty people like me exist. I am trying to be a better person, admittedly. Fanfics exist as a happy place for readers and writers, written with fancy, whim, and love. So it was a jerk move for me to write capslock and stuff. I nonetheless remembered enjoying the first few chapters, so that has to count for something. Anyways, happy reading to everyone!

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Quid_the_leach

Status: chapter 16: enrollment?

Jul 27, 2020

I was bored and chose this novel randomly.

I can only say that I do not regret reading it, my neighbors sure do, but I don't.

It's been very entertaining so far. The MC isn't "godlike from birth" like a lot of weird fanfics, but rather very normal in both strength and knowledge. We have a lot of appropriate humor and original content.

I'll give this a 5stars to support it.

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Rkh

Status: chapter 80: father’s duty

Oct 30, 2020

I read from this story only have 2-3 chapter, and I really enjoy this one with another 4 series from 4 different author.

The joke, its really resemble how my father do his prank in his early years. Another things is about eiji himself, who is literally anoyying person but draw other to him lol

Another one best about this story is the cover. Author even bother himself to put commision for it, showing how much he care about his own work.. Other than many author that just pick random picture from google.

Entertain reader ? Check

Passion in writing ? Check

Joke that make you laugh happily and imagine yourself seeing the scene directly ? Check, for me.

100% worth reading

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LazyOracle

Status: chapter 79: end of the fight

Oct 29, 2020

I love how he isnt too involved with the main characters.

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Hayate's description of him being a good guy "Doesnt have grand goals of trying to protect the world, but looks out for those close to him" is what makes this novel so enjoyable to read.

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I personally want him to develop his relationship with Tenten.

Everything except the gang thing which occurred midway.. I found enjoyable.I absolutely want more chapters

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TheDominator43

Status: chapter 32: team 11

Aug 14, 2020

A fanfic that makes sense. But it has as many fillers as Naruto. The writing and story is good. Read it if you like Naruto.

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Koda

Status: chapter 66: first summoning attempt

Oct 15, 2020

Super good so far.

Initially didnt like the gang stuff at the beginning, but don't worry that sh*t is over fast.

It's a really funny novel which seems to have started out as a joke (which was still good) but the author is putting more thought into the plot as chapters continue and it seems the MC is getting a direction in which to go to.

100% worth reading.

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Epicmender

Status: chapter will be hours later

Sep 25, 2020

It is simply too funny. I always have a great time reading every chapther

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yowofu

Status: --

Jul 30, 2020

i realy like the relaxed storytelling it goes perfectly with the MC. It is also a very refreshing take on the mostly OP MC naruto fanfics.

i realy hope you dont drop this for a while

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Bodoncio

Status: chapter 18: troublemaker-squad!

Jul 29, 2020

The author knows how to make someone laugh. Both the original Narutu's and his characters are funny and intriguing. I'm really hyped for the rest of the story

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Yurekli_Kedi

Status: chapter 83: puppet-hokage

Nov 3, 2020

A good fanfiction that has Gintama's narrative style. If you want to read a solid yet humorous fanfiction, I think this is what you need.

At times, a ridiculous theme unexpectably kicks in, other times a serious and sorrowful one. I don't know if this is author's first novel but except for the little details, of which I don't even remember the most of, there is not much to criticize, especially the later chapters.

So overall, I think you'll like it if you like funky characters and Naruto universe in general

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